You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The figures illustrate how many individuals in Korea went through a
number
of cosmetic operations
in 2004.
Overall
, it is evident that Korean
females favour these procedures significantly more than Korean
males. In addition
, there is a considerable difference in types
of popular Correct article usage
the types
operations
between the genders.
Regarding Korean
women, about 320,000 of them did
Eyelid surgery( highest Verb problem
had
number
) while
only a mere about 120,000 were
operated Liposuction( lowest Verb problem
had
number
). Rhinoplasty at about 280,000 ranks second,
followed by Laser skin
Resurfacing and Breast Capitalize word
Skin
Enlargerment
at just above 200,000 and around 150,000 respectively.
Hair Correct your spelling
enlargement
Transpilantation
stands at the top rank with 60,000 for Correct your spelling
Transplantation
Korean
males and Lasser skin resurfacing closely following with just about 5000 lower in number
. 40,000 of korean
men went through Rhinoplasty in 2004, making it the third Change the capitalization
Korean
popular
. And Correct quantifier usage
most popular
finally
, with marginally bellow
20 thousand and about 18 thousand, Abdominoplasty and Liposuction are the least relatively popular Correct your spelling
below
operations
respectively.
It is also
notable that Rhinoplasty and Lasser skin resurfacing along with
Liposuction are among common operations
in both sexes.Submitted by soroush.nezami on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, operations, korean with synonyms.
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