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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The figures illustrate how many individuals in Korea went through a
number
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 of cosmetic
operations
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 in 2004.
Overall
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, it is evident that
Korean
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 females favour these procedures significantly more than
Korean
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 males.
In addition
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, there is a considerable difference in
types
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the types
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 of popular
operations
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 between the genders. Regarding
Korean
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 women, about 320,000 of them
did
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had
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 Eyelid surgery( highest
number
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)
while
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 only a mere about 120,000
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had
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 operated Liposuction( lowest
number
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). Rhinoplasty at about 280,000 ranks
second,
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followed by Laser
skin
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Skin
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 Resurfacing and Breast
Enlargerment
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enlargement
 at just above 200,000 and around 150,000 respectively. Hair
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Transplantation
 stands at the top rank with 60,000 for
Korean
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 males and Lasser skin resurfacing closely following with just about 5000 lower in
number
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. 40,000 of
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korean
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Korean
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 men went through Rhinoplasty in 2004, making it the third
popular
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most popular
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. And
finally
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, with marginally
bellow
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below
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 20 thousand and about 18 thousand, Abdominoplasty and Liposuction are the least relatively popular
operations
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 respectively. It is
also
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 notable that Rhinoplasty and Lasser skin resurfacing
along with
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 Liposuction are among common
operations
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 in both sexes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, operations, korean with synonyms.
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