You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task

The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and

females in Korea in 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The figures illustrate how many individuals in Korea went through a
number
of cosmetic
operations
in 2004.
Overall
, it is evident that
Korean
females favour these procedures significantly more than
Korean
males.
In addition
, there is a considerable difference in
types
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the types
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of popular
operations
between the genders. Regarding
Korean
women, about 320,000 of them
did
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had
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Eyelid surgery( highest
number
)
while
only a mere about 120,000
were
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had
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operated Liposuction( lowest
number
). Rhinoplasty at about 280,000 ranks
second,
followed by Laser
skin
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Skin
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Resurfacing and Breast
Enlargerment
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enlargement
at just above 200,000 and around 150,000 respectively. Hair
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Transplantation
stands at the top rank with 60,000 for
Korean
males and Lasser skin resurfacing closely following with just about 5000 lower in
number
. 40,000 of
korean
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Korean
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men went through Rhinoplasty in 2004, making it the third
popular
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most popular
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. And
finally
, with marginally
bellow
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below
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20 thousand and about 18 thousand, Abdominoplasty and Liposuction are the least relatively popular
operations
respectively. It is
also
notable that Rhinoplasty and Lasser skin resurfacing
along with
Liposuction are among common
operations
in both sexes.
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