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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The given Pictures depict
Overall
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the Overall
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 Procedure of, how
cement
 is made as well
how
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as how
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 it
get
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gets
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 mixed with other stuff for making concrete, which is going to be used in
building
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the building
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 making process. As can be seen from the Picture of
cement
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Cement
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 Production
that
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, it has 4 steps to reach
cement
 into bags.
Cement
 is the mixture of the powder of
limeston
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limestone
as well as
 Clay. In the first
step
,
that
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both ingredients
got
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were
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 crushed by
crusher
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a crusher
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 and
become
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became
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the
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powder and
then
 went
to
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into
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mixer
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the mixer
a mixer
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, where both
mixed
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were mixed
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 well.
The next
step
 is to get
heater
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the heater
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 in the rotating heater which is the second
last
step
.
Final
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The final
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step
 is to grind in
grinder
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a grinder
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 and
then
packed
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pack
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 into bags.
According to
concrete
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the concrete
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 production image, there are
total
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a total
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four
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of four
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 ingredients needed for making concrete. Gravel which is Small Stones,
which
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apply
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is used 50%
in
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of
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 the process and sand
by
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apply
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half of it 25%.
Cement
 is 15% needed and water
by
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apply
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10% which is the least one in process
then
 all get mixed Properly in
concrete
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a concrete
the concrete
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 mixer.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, step with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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