The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

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The given Pictures depict

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Overall

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the Overall

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Procedure of, how

cement

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is made as well

how

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as how

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get

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gets

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mixed with other stuff for making concrete, which is going to be used in

building

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the building

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making process. As can be seen from the Picture of

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cement

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Cement

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Production

that

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apply

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, it has 4 steps to reach

cement

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into bags.

Cement

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is the mixture of the powder of

limeston

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limestone

as well as

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Clay. In the first

step

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that

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apply

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both ingredients

got

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were

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crushed by

crusher

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a crusher

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and

become

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became

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the

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apply

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powder and

then

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went

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into

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mixer

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the mixer

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, where both

mixed

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were mixed

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well.

The next

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step

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is to get

heater

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the heater

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in the rotating heater which is the second

last

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step

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Final

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The final

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step

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is to grind in

grinder

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a grinder

the grinder

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and

then

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packed

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pack

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into bags.

According to

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concrete

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the concrete

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production image, there are

total

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a total

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four

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of four

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ingredients needed for making concrete. Gravel which is Small Stones,

which

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apply

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is used 50%

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the process and sand

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apply

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half of it 25%.

Cement

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is 15% needed and water

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apply

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10% which is the least one in process

then

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all get mixed Properly in

concrete

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a concrete

the concrete

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mixer.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, step with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

175 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

construction
cement-making
raw materials
crushing
mixing
heating
grinding
cement powder
packaging
distribution
concrete
versatility
strength
aggregate

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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

These days many young people are spending less time doing outdoor activities such as hiking, mountain climbing, and enjoying nature. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage them to do more of these activities?

You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. -Explain the problem. -Say why the documents are important. -Suggest a solution.

The best way to make roads safer is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year.

Many people think it is the government’s responsibility to ensure the provision of good health care for everyone in the community and that each individual should be cared for by State medical programmes. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?