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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » Write at least 150 words.
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The
given
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apply
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Pie Chart depicts the causes for
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the agriculture
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agriculture
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agricultural
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 field converting into Less Productive
as well as
Provide
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Provides
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 regions affected by it. As can be seen from the table
that
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apply
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,
Europ
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Europe
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 was the one, which had the highest percentage of
land
 degraded followed by Oceania and North America.
According to
 the Pie chart, over-grazing and deforestation had
proportion
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a proportion
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 above a quarter followed by over. cultivation by 28%.
Other
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Another
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 was the One reason
of
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for
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land
degradation
 of 7%, which was the least among all
causes
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the causes
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were
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apply
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given. The most
eyecatching
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eye-catching
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 figure
of
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for
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land
degradation
 by region was Europe
by having
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with
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 nearly a quarter of total
land
degradation
 followed by Oceania
by
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with
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 13%.
However
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However,
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 Oceania was the most affected by
over- grazing
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over-grazing
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of
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at
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 11.3 %.
Meariwhile
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Meanwhile
 Europe had the major proportion
in
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of
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 deforestation
as well as
 in
over
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apply
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Cultivation
by
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apply
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9.3 and 7.7 % in
land
degradation
 as compared to all.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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