The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006
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The bar chart presents the proportion change in the share of interethnic pupils among university graduates in various Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
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not all were able to reach the minimum line in the initial years, by 2006 all students, without exception, were able to cross
this
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minimal number. It is obvious that New Brunswick could effortlessly cross the
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percentage, which is about 5% in 2001. And by 2006 it was
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able to increase to 10% without any obstacles
as well as
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in 2001. What cannot be said about Ontario, which could not even rise to 5% as New Brunswick,
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by 2006 it
finally
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could uplift to 10%. It's apparently seen that there are a lot of average provinces, so
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if we take Manitoba and Newfoundland and Labrador these two regions are approximately equal (it is about even fewer than 5%. Even in comparison with
2006
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2006,
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No one went up
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other , and by 2006 they still were identical.
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they could go up more than 5%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • share of international students
  • university graduates
  • Canadian provinces
  • increase
  • decrease
  • overall trend
  • notable similarities
  • economic conditions
  • immigration policies
  • numerical values
  • reputation of universities
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