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The figure compares layouts of the Reymouth village in 1995 and present. task1

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The figure compares layouts of the Reymouth village in 1995 and
present
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.
Overall
, considerable changes in
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 of spaces are noticeable during the period.
In addition
, some constructions and deconstructions have occured. A golf field has replaced the farmland in northeast of the village's plan and
also
 2 tennis courts are established beneath the golfing space; in the place which was a forest park in 1995 but no more exists. Currently There are 2 new houses in the west side, compared to 1995, a new road to access them is made as well. A hotel and a Cafe occupied the east side of the layout on the upside and downside of the road respectively in 1995. Nowadays a Parking space is made just next to the hotel. It is
also
 worth mentioning that on the southside of the site plan new apartments have replaced a fish market.
moreover
, a fishing port next to the sea( on the south side) which was existed in 1995 is currently demolished.
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Introduction & Conclusion
Enhance the introduction and conclusion to provide a more comprehensive overview of the changes and summarise the main points more clearly.
Cohesion
Use a range of linking words to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs for better cohesion.
Detail & Precision
Incorporate more detailed comparisons to enhance clarity and illustrate changes more vividly. For instance, describe the transformation of specific areas with more precision and detail.
Grammar
Pay attention to tense consistency to accurately reflect the changes between the past and present.
Comparison Technique
Efficient use of comparison to highlight changes over the period.
Detail Use
Inclusion of specific examples to support the descriptions, such as the transformation of the golf field and the construction of new houses.

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