The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 201 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The graph illustrates
comparison
between Add an article
a comparison
the comparison
number
of shop Change the article
a number
the number
closures
and openings in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Depending on reported
information, 2011 Add an article
the reported
has
the highest rate of openings Wrong verb form
had
of
8500 Change preposition
apply
while
this
number dramatically declined by the
2018, Change the article
apply
while
closures
perform
constantly changing results.
Wrong verb form
performed
While
opening rates of shops exceed the closures
by 2000 difference, it become
undeniable to expect Change the verb form
becomes
downfall
trend of 4000 within a year.Increasing results survived till 2014 were both opening and closers had similar rates of over 6000. For the end of Correct article usage
a downfall
2018
the number of shops that opened hit its lowest by 3000.
Closure numbers Add a comma
2018,
od
shops had drastically changing performance as it began with around 6300 in 2011, Correct your spelling
of
however
tragic decrease Add the comma(s)
however,
happed
in 2015 by 500 Correct your spelling
happen
closures
. In between
2016 Change preposition
Between
till
2018 steady rates become 5000.Correct word choice
and
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Vocabulary: Replace the words closures with synonyms.
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