The graphs give data about proportions of the results of a research at a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand

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The pie chart illustrates the information about the percentage of the reaction given by people

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new

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shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand.

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, it is clearly seen that most of the

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shown in

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satisfied and

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, no comment is the lowest one.

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large percentage of people are satisfied with

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mall which is 62% as compared to other

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, the least segment of

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chart is no comment, there are 10% mass, who did not prefer to comment on

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. Looking at statistics, the second most part of

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experienced very satisfied with 17% reaction.

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, there are few of them who

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from

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shopping

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which is about 11%.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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4 paragraphs

123 words

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The graphs give data about proportions of the results of a research at a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand

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