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The graphs give data about proportions of the results of a research at a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand

The graphs give data about proportions of the results of a research at a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand
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The pie table illustrates
regarding
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the percentage of
people
 who were satisfied with
newly
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the newly
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 built shopping plaza in Auckland, New Zealand.
Overall
, It is evident from the
chart
 that a significant majority of visitors looked fulfilled with the new shopping plaza
while
 the proportion of
people
 who disliked that facility occupied a small part of the
chart
. As can be seen from the pie
chart
, almost 80% of
people
 liked new built shopping centre including 17% of very pleasant visitors, representing a successful outcome,
while
 shopping mall can see only 11% of
people
 were not gratified with
this
 market which means it can improve its reputation after checking their evaluation. When it comes to the rest of the
chart
 details, another 10% of customers had an ambiguous attitude of answering ‘no comment’ but it can be ignored with their mimic figure. It is possible to see from the pie
chart
 that the new construction of a shopping centre in Auckland resulted in positive visitors’ reactions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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