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The graphs give data about proportions of the results of a research at a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand

The graphs give data about proportions of the results of a research at a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand
The pie table illustrates
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the percentage of
people
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 who were satisfied with
newly
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the newly
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 built shopping plaza in Auckland, New Zealand.
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, It is evident from the
chart
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 that a significant majority of visitors looked fulfilled with the new shopping plaza
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 the proportion of
people
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 who disliked that facility occupied a small part of the
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. As can be seen from the pie
chart
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, almost 80% of
people
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 liked new built shopping centre including 17% of very pleasant visitors, representing a successful outcome,
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 shopping mall can see only 11% of
people
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 were not gratified with
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 market which means it can improve its reputation after checking their evaluation. When it comes to the rest of the
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 details, another 10% of customers had an ambiguous attitude of answering ‘no comment’ but it can be ignored with their mimic figure. It is possible to see from the pie
chart
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 that the new construction of a shopping centre in Auckland resulted in positive visitors’ reactions.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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