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The line graph compares four countries in term of banana prices between 1994 and 2004. Overall, the countries experienced different trends in the time period. While the costes in USA and Japan countries increased, the prices in Germany declined. And the prices in France kept unchanged. As the chart compares , Japan's costes started around 190 in 1994 , and sharply rose approximately 290 until 1995. Then plummeted 200 prices in 1996. After experienced fluctuations between 1996 and 2001, with 2,00 and 2,30 , finally coming to 1,60 in 2001. Starting from 2001 if experienced gradual increase reaching a peak in 2004 with more than 2,60. Regarding France's prices in 1994 until 1997 remain unchanged. After prices fluctuations from 1998 to 2004 with 1,60. Afterward the Germany prices slightly plunged around 1,30 in 1995. Then prices fluctuations from 1996 to 2001, and between 2002 and 2004 keet unchanged. The costes in USA gradually climbed 1,20 from 1994 to 1995. Then slightly declined 1,00 in 1997. Afterward the costes keep unchanged between 1998 and 2004.

The line graph compares four countries in term of banana prices between 1994 and 2004. Overall, the countries experienced different trends in the time period. While the costes in USA and Japan countries increased, the prices in Germany declined. And the prices in France kept unchanged. As the chart compares , Japan's costes started around 190 in 1994 , and sharply rose approximately 290 until 1995. Then plummeted 200 prices in 1996. After experienced fluctuations between 1996 and 2001, with 2,00 and 2,30 , finally coming to 1,60 in 2001. Starting from 2001 if experienced gradual increase reaching a peak in 2004 with more than 2,60. Regarding France's prices in 1994 until 1997 remain unchanged. After prices fluctuations from 1998 to 2004 with 1,60. Afterward the Germany prices slightly plunged around 1,30 in 1995. Then prices fluctuations from 1996 to 2001, and between 2002 and 2004 keet unchanged. The costes in USA gradually climbed 1,20 from 1994 to 1995. Then slightly declined 1,00 in 1997. Afterward the costes keep unchanged between 1998 and 2004.
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The line graph compares four countries in
term
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terms
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 of banana
prices
 between 1994 and 2004.
Overall
, the countries experienced different trends in the time period.
While
 the
costes
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costs
 in
USA
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the USA
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 and Japan countries increased, the
prices
 in Germany declined. And the
prices
 in France
kept
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remained
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 unchanged. As the chart compares , Japan's
costes
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costs
 started around 190 in 1994 , and sharply rose approximately 290 until 1995.
Then
 plummeted 200
prices
 in 1996. After
experienced
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experiencing
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 fluctuations between 1996 and 2001, with 2,00 and 2,30 ,
finally
 coming to 1,60 in 2001. Starting from 2001
if
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it
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 experienced
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase reaching a peak in 2004 with more than 2,60.
Regarding
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France's
prices
in
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from
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 1994 until 1997
remain
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 unchanged. After
prices
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price
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 fluctuations from 1998 to 2004 with 1,60. Afterward
the
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apply
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Germany
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German
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prices
 slightly
plunged
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around 1,30 in 1995.
Then
prices
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price
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 fluctuations from 1996 to 2001, and between 2002 and 2004 keet unchanged. The
costes
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costs
 in
USA
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the USA
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 gradually climbed 1,20 from 1994 to 1995.
Then
 slightly declined 1,00 in 1997.
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Afterwards
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Afterward
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 the
costes
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costs
 keep unchanged between 1998 and 2004.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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