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The chart illustrates the quantity of participants who showed interest in sport sphere from 1985 to 2005. Overall, While basketball and badminton players remained stable, the players of tennis rose, and the players of rugby fell over time. The tennis as well as rugby sports had different amount of players in the time period. As the line graph compares, that badminton players were around 51 in 1985 . Then players slightly decreased to around 49 in 1990. However, players remained stable in 50 from 1995 to 2005. Regarding basketball's players, in 1985 there were approximately 75 people. Unfortunately, the figure slowly decreased to 70 in 1990. Afterward remained constant around 77 between 1995 and 2005. The tennis participants were 150 in 1985. The percentage gradually increased to approximately 175 in 1990 reaching a peak with around 225 participants in 2005. The players of rugby were around 240 in 1985. Afterwards people steadily declined just over 200 in 1995. Then participants rapidly went down to 50 from 1995 to 2005.

The chart illustrates the quantity of participants who showed interest in sport sphere from 1985 to 2005. Overall, While basketball and badminton players remained stable, the players of tennis rose, and the players of rugby fell over time. The tennis as well as rugby sports had different amount of players in the time period. As the line graph compares, that badminton players were around 51 in 1985 . Then players slightly decreased to around 49 in 1990. However, players remained stable in 50 from 1995 to 2005. Regarding basketball's players, in 1985 there were approximately 75 people. Unfortunately, the figure slowly decreased to 70 in 1990. Afterward remained constant around 77 between 1995 and 2005. The tennis participants were 150 in 1985. The percentage gradually increased to approximately 175 in 1990 reaching a peak with around 225 participants in 2005. The players of rugby were around 240 in 1985. Afterwards people steadily declined just over 200 in 1995. Then participants rapidly went down to 50 from 1995 to 2005.
The chart illustrates the
quantity
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number
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 of
participants
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 who showed interest in
sport
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the sport
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 sphere from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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,
While
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 basketball and badminton
players
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 remained stable, the
players
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 of tennis rose, and the
players
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 of rugby fell over time. The tennis
as well as
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 rugby sports had different
amount
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amounts
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 of
players
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 in the time period. As the line graph compares,
that
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the
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 badminton
players
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 were around 51 in 1985 .
Then
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players
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 slightly decreased to around 49 in 1990.
However
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,
players
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 remained stable in 50 from 1995 to 2005. Regarding
basketball's
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basketball
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players
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, in 1985 there were approximately 75 people. Unfortunately, the figure slowly decreased to 70 in 1990. Afterward remained constant
around
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at around
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 77 between 1995 and 2005. The tennis
participants
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 were 150 in 1985. The percentage gradually increased to approximately 175 in 1990 reaching a peak with around 225
participants
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 in 2005. The
players
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 of rugby were around 240 in 1985.
Afterwards
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Afterwards,
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 people steadily declined
just
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by just
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 over 200 in 1995.
Then
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participants
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 rapidly went down to 50 from 1995 to 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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