The leaders of most organizations tend to be older people. However, some argue that younger people make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traditionally, most of the companies, MNC’s and other organizations offer the executive positions to elder
people
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exists a quarrel that younger folks are best leaders. I unequivocally agree that older
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better
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young
people
, as they have more in-depth knowledge and experience.
To begin
with, a global shift can be observed where
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number of companies are being managed by younger
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and it sometimes leads to temporary or sometimes permanent
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instability
of companies performance. One profound reason should be risk
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nature of young
people
and lack of
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experience. Young
people
have
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perspective,
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way of decision making which leads them to think out of the box,
this
occasionally may benefit the organizations but may
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cause an arm and a leg.
For instance
, Elon Musk’s own statements
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of times caused Tesla’s
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share to face
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dip.
Additionally
, achieving
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position at
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age can make them
egostic
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egoistic
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their decision-making ability.
On the other hand
, older
people
have dealt with
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of ups and downs in their
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which
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their situational awareness
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and results
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in building quick and effective
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abilities. Older
people
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already learnt and know the best way to handle a situation, whether taking a bold,
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decision or
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with
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and conservative approach.
For example
, it can be observed some of the most powerful organizations like Blackrock and Vanguard are being managed by relatively older
people
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with
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their knowledge
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developing, making them
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suitable for higher positions within
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the organization
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. In a nutshell, older
people
are suitable for executive positions
due to
their conservative approach toward
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growth and
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real world
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experience they bring with them
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the table.
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Ensure comparison points between younger and older leaders are clear and contrasting, highlighting the impact of their differences thoroughly.
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Expand on specific examples to demonstrate how older leaders' experience translates into organizational benefits, ensuring examples are deeply explored.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the logical progression of ideas by introducing more varied connectors and transitions. This aids the reader in following the argumentation more seamlessly.
Task Achievement
Given the strong stance in favor of older leaders, including a brief acknowledgment of the strengths of younger leaders and how they might complement traditional leadership models could enrich the essay's depth.
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The essay presents a well-defined stance, maintaining a clear position throughout.
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Effective use of examples to support arguments, such as Elon Musk and companies like Blackrock and Vanguard.
Coherence and Cohesion
Good overall structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, enhancing readability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Introduction and conclusion effectively encapsulate the essay's main points and stance, providing a cohesive frame for the argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • strategic decision-making
  • crisis management
  • innovative ideas
  • adaptable
  • tech-savvy
  • digital transformation
  • complex situations
  • high-pressure decisions
  • empathy
  • patience
  • strategic foresight
  • authoritative
  • collaborative work culture
  • dynamic
  • inclusive organizational culture
  • ageism
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