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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the process of electricity generation in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the main facilities are the
dam
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 and
power
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station
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 that control the
flow
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 of
water
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.
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, the direction of the
flow
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 is different on the day and night. The
Dam
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,
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apply
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 is built on the high-level
reservoir
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 of rivers,
operates
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and operates
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 differently depending on the time of day. In the daytime,
intake
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the intake
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 of
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dam
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the dam
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open
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opens
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, and
water
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flow
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flows
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 down through the
power
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station
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 in order to generate electricity,
then
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 it
arrive
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arrives
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the
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at the
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 low-level
reservoir
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. The
flow
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 of
water
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 through the reversible turbines of the
power
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station
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, which operate
generator
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a generator
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 to produce electricity and through the
power
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 lines to
national
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the national
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 grid. In the night, the whole process is reversed. The reversible turbines of
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power
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the power
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station
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 pump
water
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 from the low-level
reservoir
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 back into the high-level
reservoir
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. Concurrently, the intake gates of the
dam
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 are closed so that it
avoid
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avoids
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water
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flow
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 down.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, dam, flow, water, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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