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Band 4.5

Human activities have negative effects on plants and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do something about the problem, while others believe that effective action can be taken to improve the situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, too many
people
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 have
discused
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discussed
 the harmful
actions
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 that have
effect
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an effect
the effect
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 the
enviroment
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environment
 and the creatures. Some of them assert that it is
so
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too
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 far to deal with
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 situation.
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While others
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 believe that there are several different kinds of
actions
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could
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that could
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 be used in order to fix and solve these issues. From my
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perspective
prespective
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i
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 believe that it is far from over to let these bad habits
goes
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 away and
people
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 should control them and minimize them as soon as possible. Research has found that countries with massive human
nagitive
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negative
 activities
is
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 a result of non-fixing these problems and it is the
resonsibility
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responsibility
 of the administration. The administration should
plays
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 a prominent role in promoting human bad behaviour.
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, In Singapore, the government published
t-shirt
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t-shirts
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 with
everysingle
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every single
tickets
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 related to
throwning
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throwing
the
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trash
oll
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all
 over the
places
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.
Therefore
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,
people
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 will
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be afriad
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afriad
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afraid
 of
broking
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 the role and
payed
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paying
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 a significant amount of money.
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 strict rule will encourage an enormous number of
people
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 to respect the
enviromental
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environmental
environment
 and animal spots.
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,
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this
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in this
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 situation will lead
for
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to
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 a serious disaster and the quality of life will
decreased
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decrease
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 so dramatically.
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, In Kuwait
people
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 are used to
throw
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throwing
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trashes
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trash
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 and food cans in the sea. Even
when
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 Kuwait has
selected
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been selected
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 as an oil country, the level of
the
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bad emissions
such
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 as gasses and dangerous liquids
are
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 significantly increased, it can't be
controled
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controlled
 once these bad habits are applied
from
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by
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the
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apply
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society. In conclusion, both of president and
government
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the government
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 should cooperate in order to achieve good results. I totally agree with standing next to the
actions
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 that provide the
improvment
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improvement
 of our plant and individuals should select
these situation
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this situation
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 as
an
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essential
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actions
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action
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.

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Clarity
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Spelling/Grammar
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Errors in these areas can distract from your argument and make your essay harder to follow.
Structure
Structure your essay more effectively. Provide a clear introduction, body paragraphs that each discuss a single main idea, and a conclusion that summarizes your opinion and arguments.
Supporting Examples
Use specific examples to support your arguments. While you have provided some examples, more detailed or concrete examples could strengthen your essay.
Understanding of Topic
You have engaged with the topic and provided an opinion, which shows a good understanding of the task.
Balanced Argument
You included both sides of the argument in your discussion, which is good practice for this type of essay.
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