The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.​Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.​Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented bar chart illustrates the
percetange
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percentage
of different genders
teachers
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of teachers
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in six different types of educational
setting
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settings
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in the UK in the year 2010. It's a surprise that in pre-school and primary school more than 80
percents
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per cent
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of the
teachers
are
women
. It shows that still in secondary school female
teachers
are
more
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apply
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than
men
which shows nearly 50
percents
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percent
show examples
of them are
women
.
However
, in college the amount of male and female
teachers
are
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is
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equal.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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when it
goes
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comes
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to private
tarining
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training
institutes and
university
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universities
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, we see that there are more male
teachers
and fewer females.
This
chart shows that
women
prefer to work as a
teacher
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teachers
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in lower grades of school and they are less comfortable
to teach
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teaching
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as a
proffessor
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professor
in private institutes and universities.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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this
bar chart
is telling
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tells
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us that
men
prefer to work with adults rather than
younger
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the younger
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generation or
childrens
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children
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.
This
might be
for
this
reason that
women
have more
patient
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patience
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that
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than
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men
and they like children more than
men
. Working with children needs a lot of patience which
men
don't have normally.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Distribution
  • Gender disparities
  • Educational settings
  • Predominance
  • Representation
  • Societal biases
  • Systemic biases
  • Recruitment
  • Accessibility
  • Work-life balance
  • Societal expectations
  • Perceived suitability
  • Efforts to balance
  • Gender equality
  • Policymakers
  • Educational leaders
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