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The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers

The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers
#line #consumption #food #australian #teenagers
The graph
copmares
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compares
 three different fast food sales between 1975 and 2000. In the 1975 Australian
teenegers
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teenagers
consume
Wrong verb form
consumed
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pizza
 and hamburgers 15
times
in
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apply
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a year.
After
this
 figure experienced a rapid
grow
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growth
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 to 80
times
 in 1985.At the same
time
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time,
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 they
eaten
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ate
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pizza
 and fish but the graph shows fish
Add a missing verb
was cunsumed
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cunsumed
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consumed
 100
times
 and
pizza
consumed
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was consumed
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 15
times
 in 1975.
Afterwards
Add a comma
Afterwards,
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this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 figures dramatically
fluctuate
Wrong verb form
fluctuated
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 to 90
times
 in ten
year
Change to a plural noun
years
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 and
pizza
 consumption they were eaten 40
times
 to 1985.
Amount
Correct article usage
The amount
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 of 1985 and 2000
figure
Fix the agreement mistake
figures
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compares
Verb problem
apply
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reveals
Correct subject-verb agreement
reveal
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 experienced a fall down to 40
times
 in 2000. After hamburgers and
pizza
 were eaten
to
Change preposition
apply
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100 and 80
times
 in 2000
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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