Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the nwin function of a university?

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policies can be divided into two different aspects. One aspect focuses on supporting
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the other emphasizes the importance of acquiring
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skills
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. Other people believe
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knowledge
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is
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essay is going to discuss both
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and my opinion. Clearly,
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learn
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about future
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that will help to get professional
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and speed up
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progress in science.
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, if
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was
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taught
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already by
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, they
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industrial revolution
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period, some
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opened technology
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to offer kids
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, but they
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not understand
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,
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found
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kids
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invent new things to make
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easier.
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, some professional
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need
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more
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time
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as nuclear technology. Highly specialized jobs require more time to learn, if
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skills
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can be learned right from school, technological progress will be accelerated. Contrarily, some people think
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knowledge
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university
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that
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way.
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,
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learn common
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maybe
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can find different
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and
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. Diverse
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will help
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to find their life purpose.
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, most
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multiplex, which not only
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that
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also
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need different
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jobs
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to
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as
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and poet
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. If
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is going to just only
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workers
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,
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will lose
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society
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. In conclusion, there are always two sides to every issue, and
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education issue is no exception, let based on the arguments above,I,on balance,am of the opinion that
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work
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skill
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in
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still carry more weight
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knowledge
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.
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