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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant .

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant .
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The charts compare what graduate and postgraduate
students
Use synonyms
 did
at the end
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 of their studies in 2008 in the UK . In the first chart, we can see the numbers of graduate
students
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 and four categories of occupations excluding full-time
work
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, that they did. Most graduate
students
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 choose to do
further
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 study
while
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 the least choose voluntary
work
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. These
two
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 categories are numbered 29,665 and 3,500
students
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 respectively. The other
two
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 types which are mentioned are part-time
work
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 and unemployment. These
two
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 have a similar number of
students
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 approximately 17,000 in each category. In the second chart, we observe that same as the first chart most graduates choose to do
further
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 study and the least voluntary
work
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. Those who follow
further
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 study are 2,725
while
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 those who do voluntary
work
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 are 345. In
this
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 case, part-time workers are numbered at 2,535 and unemployed postgraduates at 1,625.
Overall
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 there is a significant difference between the
two
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 charts.
This
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 is about the number scale of
students
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.
Otherwise
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, the four categories have the same position in both charts.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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