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the diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production

the diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production
The illustration presents information about the production of
energy
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 for homes in the future. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, the process consists of seven stages, starting with filling compost and water and
the
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apply
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culminating with generating the battery for home usage. First of all, a steel tank is filled three-quarters with water and compost
such
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 as leaves, and decayed food. Methane
gas
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 occurs
in
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at
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 the end
up
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apply
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of
this
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 process. Methane
gas
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carry
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carried
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with
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in
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 tubes
are
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is
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 stored
a
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in a
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big flask. Following that
gas
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 which is in the flask enters through one pipe a compressor. The next level involves creating mechanical
energy
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 after the combustion of methane
gas
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.
This
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 mechanical
energy
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 accumulates in
generator
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the generator
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which
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and
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 mechanical
energy
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are
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is
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 transformed
electrical
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into electrical
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energy
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. Electrical
energy
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is stores
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stores
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stored
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 in one battery which
provide
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provides
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energy
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 for
home
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the home
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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