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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The given charts depict numerous
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languages
 known by learners of
UK
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the UK
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in addition
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 to
the
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apply
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English between 2000 to 2010.
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 , as can be seen from the Chart that, after a decade, Spanish was the one
lanangage
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language
 which had the highest followers as compared to
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another language
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language
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. In 2000, the ability
of speaking
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to speak
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German
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language
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as well as
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 two different languages had the lowest Proportion by 10%. The same case
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happened
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 with French only and another
language
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 but there was a slight
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increase
increased
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had
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apply
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15
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a 15
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% of
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the proportion
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.
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,
ability
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the ability
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 to speak Spanish was the highest followed by no other
language
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by
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at
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 30% and 20% . In 2010,
according to
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the Chart
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, the Proportion of Spanish
Speaker Swelled
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speakers swelled
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 significantly and reached
to
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apply
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35%. No Other
language
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 French only Showed
decline
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a decline
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 and dropped
at
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to
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 10%, which was similar to German.
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, another
language
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as well as
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 two other languages rose by 20% and 15%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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