The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The given pie charts picture information about the
consumption
of
food
in the
world
in 2008. Compared to two countries
china
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China
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and
India
. As
resealed
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revealed
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by
consumption
of animals
food
was substantially worldwide 27 and in
India
26. The percentage of the average
consumption
of vegetables and fruits was 32% in China.
On the other hand
, these raw materials only contribute 23% of Indians and 29 % of the
world
’s. People in the
world
consumption
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consumed
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41% consumed
food
in 2008 years,
this
food
was much
popular
Correct quantifier usage
more popular
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then
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than
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others
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other
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food
.
India
used 39%. Processed
food
whereas
Chinese
people ate 5% less than
India
. is worth noticing that
Indian
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Indians
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ate more animal foods than
Chinese
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the Chinese
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did
while
Chinese
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the Chinese
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devoured more vegetables, fruits and seeds than
Indians
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the Indians
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. On
an
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apply
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average,
Indian
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the Indian
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population consumed more animal foods and
seeds
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seed
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items than the
world
population
while
Chinese
people ate more
vegetable
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vegetables
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and seeds than the rest of the
world
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, food, world, india, chinese with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • average consumption
  • worldwide
  • data
  • comparison
  • differences
  • similarities
  • food items
  • categories
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • majority
  • minority
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