The table below shows the percentage of employers in various sectors having difficulty in finding staff in 2003 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of employers in various sectors having difficulty in finding staff in 2003 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares the difficulty for employers to find employees in disparate categories in
two
separate years.
Overall
, It is obvious that in most categories, manufacturing staff were
hardest
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the hardest
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to find. Meanwhile,
service
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the service
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sector had
less
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fewer
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problems
to find
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finding
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employees.
Building
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The building
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sector
also
suffered a lot in terms of finding human force,
besides
manufacturing. In both 2003 and 2004,
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the maufacturing
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maufacturing
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manufacturing
industry had about 3 to 5 per cent more problems
to find
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finding
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skilled
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a skilled
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workforce. Simultaneously, these
statistices
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statistics
are
also
correct for unskilled ones, with just
reduction
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a reduction
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of their percentages from 40 to 50 in qualified ones to 20 to 30 in unqualified ones.
However
, In terms of technical and managerial staff,
building
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the building
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industry had more problems. Commerce and services were
two
other sectors with more popularity than
two
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the two
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other industries. In 2003, commerce had between
two
to six per cent more
troubles
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trouble
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to find
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finding
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proficient and unproficient workforce
while
in
technical
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the technical
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and managerial section, it faced
less
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fewer
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troubles. Unlike that, in 2004,
service
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the service
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sector struggled more to find humans to work for.
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