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The table below shows the percentage of employers in various sectors having difficulty in finding staff in 2003 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of employers in various sectors having difficulty in finding staff in 2003 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the difficulty for employers to find employees in disparate categories in
two
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 separate years.
Overall
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, It is obvious that in most categories, manufacturing staff were
hardest
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the hardest
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 to find. Meanwhile,
service
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the service
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 sector had
less
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fewer
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 problems
to find
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finding
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 employees.
Building
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The building
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 sector
also
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 suffered a lot in terms of finding human force,
besides
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 manufacturing. In both 2003 and 2004,
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the maufacturing
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maufacturing
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manufacturing
 industry had about 3 to 5 per cent more problems
to find
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finding
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skilled
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a skilled
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 workforce. Simultaneously, these
statistices
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statistics
 are
also
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 correct for unskilled ones, with just
reduction
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a reduction
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 of their percentages from 40 to 50 in qualified ones to 20 to 30 in unqualified ones.
However
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, In terms of technical and managerial staff,
building
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the building
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 industry had more problems. Commerce and services were
two
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 other sectors with more popularity than
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two
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the two
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 other industries. In 2003, commerce had between
two
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 to six per cent more
troubles
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trouble
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to find
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finding
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 proficient and unproficient workforce
while
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 in
technical
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the technical
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 and managerial section, it faced
less
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fewer
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 troubles. Unlike that, in 2004,
service
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the service
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 sector struggled more to find humans to work for.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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