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The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts
iluustrate
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illustrate
illustrates
 the percentage of water used for different goals in six different locations of the world. Proportions are divided into three fields
such
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 as
,
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 industrial
use
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, agricultural
use
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 and
domenstic
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domestic
use
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.
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, there is a good trend in agriculture
use
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 in Africa, Central
Asia
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, South East
Asia
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 and South
America
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. Europe and North
America
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 have a great illustration of industrial
use
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. The highest domestic
use
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 is in South
America
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by
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19per
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19 per
 cent and the lowest rate is in Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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by
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 the same 7%. In Europe, industrial
use
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 is leading by 53% and
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the following
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following
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 factors are agriculture and domestic with 32% and 15%.
Industrial
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 sector has the
most
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highest
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 minimum version in Central
Asia
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 by 5 percent which is 2 times more than South
America
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's. Agriculture's maximum percentage has almost no differences between 81%
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 88%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words use, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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