The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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This
bar chart illustrates the employment rate of Linking Words
elderly
Correct article usage
the elderly
according to
gender in four different states in 1970 and 2000.
In general, Linking Words
men
became dominant in Use synonyms
workplace
for elder people in all representative states in each continent.
In 1970, most elderly work field was occupied by Add an article
the workplace
men
, especially in Japan, where 84 Use synonyms
percent
of the old Use synonyms
Use synonyms
worker
were Fix the agreement mistake
workers
men
and just 16 Use synonyms
percent
of them were women. Use synonyms
This
situation Linking Words
also
happened in Belgium, Australia, and Linking Words
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
which
Correct word choice
where
male
accounted Fix the agreement mistake
males
over
70 Change preposition
for over
Use synonyms
percent
of elder employment.
Change the spelling
per cent
This
pattern slowly changed in 2000. Female Linking Words
Use synonyms
worker
continued to increase in each country, and even overtaking male Fix the agreement mistake
workers
worker
domination. Use synonyms
For example
, in Belgium, only 19 Linking Words
Use synonyms
percent
of old Change the spelling
per cent
Use synonyms
worker
were Fix the agreement mistake
workers
men
, Use synonyms
the
remaining 81 Correct word choice
and the
Use synonyms
percent
were women. It Change the spelling
per cent
also
occurred in two Linking Words
others
states where women eventually became Correct quantifier usage
other
majority
in work place in early 2000. But Japan was still dominated by old Add an article
the majority
a majority
men
back Use synonyms
then
.Linking Words
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