You recently travelled by train on a long journey and you experienced various problems. Write a letter to the train company’s head office. In your letter, give the details of your journey, including the date, time and where you sat explain the problems that happened and express your dissatisfaction ask about what action will be taken to improve the service
Dear Sir or Madam,
Greetings,
I hope
this
letter finds well
, I am writing to you with regard to your travelling services, I would like to express my Correct pronoun usage
you well
dissatisfaying
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dissatisfaction
about
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with
it
. In Correct pronoun usage
them
this
letter
I will explain the reasons with evidence.
Add a comma
letter,
Firstly
, I was travelling from Cairo to Alexandria in
the 5th of May at 1.00 pm, my seat number was 145 in the middle carriage which was class A. Change preposition
on
Although
my ticket was quite expensive, the service was not satisfaying
.
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satisfying
Secondly
, I got verious
problems Correct your spelling
various
serious
such
as cleaning and broken chairs, in addition
, the smell of carriage was unpleasant, therefore
it was very
annoying experience. If I Add an article
a very
knew
that before, I would not have booked with you.
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had known
Lastly
, I would like you to consider cleaning
issues I mentioned above, Correct article usage
the cleaning
moreover
, you have to secure a representative from your company to be there to fix these problems quickly.
I am looking forward to your prompt action.
Yours faithfully,
Adam Ali.Submitted by abdoo.magicoo on
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grammar
Ensure to double-check for grammatical errors and typos to improve clarity and professionalism.
vocabulary
Consider using a wider range of vocabulary to express dissatisfaction more effectively.
content
Try to provide specific suggestions or requests for improvement to make your letter more persuasive.
details
You clearly described the journey, including the date, time, and seating, which meets the task's requirements efficiently.
structure
Your letter follows a logical structure: introducing the topic, explaining the problems, and suggesting a form of redress, which aids in coherence and understanding.