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You recently travelled by train on a long journey and you experienced various problems. Write a letter to the train company’s head office. In your letter, give the details of your journey, including the date, time and where you sat explain the problems that happened and express your dissatisfaction ask about what action will be taken to improve the service

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Dear Sir or Madam, Greetings, I hope
this
 letter finds
well
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you well
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, I am writing to you with regard to your travelling services, I would like to express my
dissatisfaying
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dissatisfaction
about
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with
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it
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them
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. In
this
letter
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letter,
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 I will explain the reasons with evidence.
Firstly
, I was travelling from Cairo to Alexandria
in
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on
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 the 5th of May at 1.00 pm, my seat number was 145 in the middle carriage which was class A.
Although
 my ticket was quite expensive, the service was not
satisfaying
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satisfying
.
Secondly
, I got
verious
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various
serious
 problems
such
 as cleaning and broken chairs,
in addition
, the smell of carriage was unpleasant,
therefore
 it was
very
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a very
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 annoying experience. If I
knew
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 that before, I would not have booked with you.
Lastly
, I would like you to consider
cleaning
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the cleaning
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 issues I mentioned above,
moreover
, you have to secure a representative from your company to be there to fix these problems quickly. I am looking forward to your prompt action. Yours faithfully, Adam Ali.
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grammar
Ensure to double-check for grammatical errors and typos to improve clarity and professionalism.
vocabulary
Consider using a wider range of vocabulary to express dissatisfaction more effectively.
content
Try to provide specific suggestions or requests for improvement to make your letter more persuasive.
details
You clearly described the journey, including the date, time, and seating, which meets the task's requirements efficiently.
structure
Your letter follows a logical structure: introducing the topic, explaining the problems, and suggesting a form of redress, which aids in coherence and understanding.

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