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You have been invited to attend an admissions interview for a prestigious college. Unfortunately, you cannot come at the proposed time due to a previous appointment. Write a letter to the admissions tutor and explain your position. In your letter: Introduce yourself and state your interest in the program Apologize and offer to come at a different time

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Dear Sir, Greetings, I hope
this
 letter finds you well, I am writing to you with regard to the admission interview appointment on the 5th of May, I am terribly sorry, I will not be able to attend
this
 as I have a previous appointment
of applying
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 to a part-time job.
Firslty
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First
, I am Faten Fakeer,
my
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 profile number is 0005, I
was
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am
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 interested in the Spanish language program,
in
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 addition, I
was
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 applying to Cairo
state university
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State University
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.
Although
this
 was too far from my hometown, I was quite pleased to
enroll
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 in
this
 remarkable entity.
Lastly
, I want to express my deep apologies,
besides
, I would like to suggest a different time to attend the admissions interview, if I had the opportunity to cancel
my
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 previous one I mentioned above, I would have
done
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,
however
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 it was not possible at all. I am looking forward to your kind reply. Yours faithfully, Faten Fakeer.
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Task Achievement
Remember to clearly state your request for an alternative appointment time, providing specific dates or range if possible, to make your letter more effective.
Coherence & Cohesion
Maintain a clear structure within paragraphs, making sure each is devoted to a specific aspect of your communication.
Task Achievement
You successfully introduced yourself and explained your interest in the program, which is crucial for task response.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter's greeting and closing were appropriately formal, fitting the context of a letter to an academic institution.
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