The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart
compare
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compares
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the proportion of
water
usage in
San
Diego
and
California
with the
rest
of the
world
.
Overall
,
while
San
Diego
County and
California
usage
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use
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the
water
for residential
used
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use
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, it
reverse
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reverses
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with the
rest
of the
world
where
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which
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used
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uses
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the
water
for agricultural purposes.
In addition
, the
number
of
water
used in industry sectors
were
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was
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23% and 33% for
San
Diego
and
California
whereas
the
number
water
used in industry for the
rest
of the
world
was 23%.
However
, the
number
used of
water
in agricultural sectors
were
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was
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dominated by the
rest
of the
world
which is 60%, followed by
San
Diego
and
California
were
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which had
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17% and 28%.
Lastly
, for residential
purposes
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purposes,
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the highest
number
was 60% for
San
Diego
followed by
California
in second with 39% and the
rest
of the
wolrd
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world
was only 8%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, san, diego, california, rest, world, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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