The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart
compare
the proportion of Change the verb form
compares
water
usage in San
Diego
and California
with the rest
of the world
.
Overall
, while
San
Diego
County and California
usage
the Replace the word
use
water
for residential used
, it Replace the word
use
reverse
with the Change the verb form
reverses
rest
of the world
where
Correct word choice
which
used
the Wrong verb form
uses
water
for agricultural purposes.
In addition
, the number
of water
used in industry sectors were
23% and 33% for Correct subject-verb agreement
was
San
Diego
and California
whereas
the number
water
used in industry for the rest
of the world
was 23%. However
, the number
used of water
in agricultural sectors were
dominated by the Correct subject-verb agreement
was
rest
of the world
which is 60%, followed by San
Diego
and California
were
17% and 28%. Verb problem
which had
Lastly
, for residential purposes
the highest Add a comma
purposes,
number
was 60% for San
Diego
followed by California
in second with 39% and the rest
of the wolrd
was only 8%.Correct your spelling
world
Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, san, diego, california, rest, world, number with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!