The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams below illustrate the
silkworm
's cycle of living and the several steps of cloth making by using silk.
Overall
, there are two different processes connected with each other
by-product
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they make and use. At the start, there is only
silkworm
as a resource,
while
in the next
process
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there is a pot and a desk for weaving and water as the only ingredient except the selected cocoon. The
silkworm
evolution consists of 4 periods, meanwhile, the production of silk cloth takes 6 steps before the final result.
The first step is
the mature worm lays an egg and after 10 days turns into a
silkworm
larva. In
this
kind of step, they eat a mulberry leaf until there were
grow
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in 4 to 6 weeks. the second stage is when they start to be covered by a cord and usually, it needs not less than 3, but no more than 8 days to fully cover and transform into a cocoon. That cocoon is getting ready to be born in two weeks and an additional 2 days and it became a moth.
Secondly
, before starting the manufacturing of
a
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cloth, they need to select the best ones and boil them.
Next,
the boiled cotton needs an unwinding that gives the end from 300 to 900 meters of
fiber
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fibre
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. Afterwards, they twist the silk thread weave it on the special wooden desk and dye it in the big pot.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words silkworm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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