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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year
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The table depicts how unemployed people in
UK
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 spent their whole
day
last
 year by splitting the
day
 into two parts; morning and afternoon and categorising the tasks gender-wise as well. In the morning,
mostly
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most
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 men utilized their
time
 in job hunting followed by shopping and housework
while
 in the afternoon, they used their
time
 on watching TV and doing gardening.
on the other hand
, women spent much of their
time
on
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doing housework and shopping in the first
half
 as well in
second
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the second
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half
 of the
day
. Drinking and staying in bed were the activities on which both genders spent less
time
 in a
day
.
Firstly
, male people tried to find
out
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jobs for them in the morning and did
grocery
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groceries
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 and performed housework as well. In the afternoon, they consumed their 14%
time
on
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watching TV, 13% on gardening and 12% on visiting friends.
Furthermore
, they spent less
time
on
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drinking and staying in bed in
first
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the first
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half
 and second
half
 respectively.
Secondly
, females spent most of their
time
in
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doing household routine tasks followed by shopping and job searching
in
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the whole
day
. They
consumed
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spent
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 less
time
in
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drinking and staying in bed.
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