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The table shows the proportion of women in the labour force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of women in the labour force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the accumulation of
women
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working
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work
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 in the
Labour
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Force
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 compared to
woman
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women
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 in
The
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apply
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Management
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 in five different nations shown in
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
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, it is completely clear that the number of
women
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working
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work
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 in the
Labour
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Force
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 mostly
surppassed
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surpassed
women
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 who
working
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work
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 behind
desk
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desks
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. Interestingly, Sri
Langka
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Lanka
 has the lowest percentage of
Women
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 in
Management
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 compared to any other means of nations mentioned.
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 with, Australia and the United States have the biggest number of
women
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working
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work
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 in both sectors, about 42% and 46% for
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Labour
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the Labour
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Force
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sector
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 respectively, and
similarly
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 contribute around 43% in both
country
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countries
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 for
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Management
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the Management
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sector
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. Egypt, Sri Lanka and Japan
has
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 the lowest contribution of
worker
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workers
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 in the
Management
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sector
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, with just below 17%. Apparently,
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Labour
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the Labour
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Force
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 is the most popular working
sector
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 in Sri Lanka, and only 9% of
women
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are insterested
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insterested
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interested
working
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in working
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 in
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Management
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the Management
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sector
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 there.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, labour, force, management, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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