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The diagrams below show the process of producing olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the process of producing olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The olive
oil making
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oil-making
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 process is illustrated on the diagram right here.
Overall
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, there are two ingredients
as
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apply
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olive and water,
7
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with 7
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stages starting with picking and ending with
commercial
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a commercial
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 transaction.
Also
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, there
are
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is
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equipment
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pieces of equipment
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 as washer, smasher,
the
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apply
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bags, mechanical presser and separator in
olive
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the olive
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 oil manufacturing procedure.
At
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In
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 the beginning, the olives
picked
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are picked
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 and fit into
rinsing
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the rinsing
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 machine and
get
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apply
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washed with cold water.
Then
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 the smasher makes a porridge by using the bolt on it.
Additionally
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, they have two options after the smashing machine
as
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apply
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a
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apply
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continue
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continues
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by
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apply
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doing an olive paste or olive stones. After that, the olive paste
placed
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was placed
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 into the bags with holes for air circulation and bags with them pressed in pressing construction. When they finish with the previous step, they
goes
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 to a separator which helps to separate
a
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apply
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water from oil and
a
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the
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 final product sends to
a storage rooms
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a storage room
storage rooms
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 and
went
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goes
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 to shops and malls to be sold

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