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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The charts illustrate
the
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water
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 usage and its purposes in six different locations around the world.
Overall
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it is clear that
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water
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 is used
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mostly for agricultural demands.
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, the
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 tends to be the least in these areas.
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, in Central and South East Asia the
water
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 consumption is highly similar, occupying most of the chart at 88% and 81% respectively.
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, the
water
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 used for factories is slightly more in South East Asia
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water
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 in Africa and South America is mostly used for agricultural purposes at 84% and 71% each
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in addition
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 the
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 consumed in South America is twice as much as it is in Africa
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 the industrial
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 consumption in South America East side more than in
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Africa.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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