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The bar chart shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the US, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009

The bar chart shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the US, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009
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The bar graph compares shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States,
Canada
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, the United Kingdom, and
Japan
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 in 2009.
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, we see that in food and
transportations
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transportation
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, all four countries rise and fall almost the same, in housing, these indicators are very high, but in health care and clothing, they are at a very low
level
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. As we can see in the chart,
USA
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's
level
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in
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 food is about 13% and
Canada
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's is 15%. The
level
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 of Great Britain is slightly less than that of
Japan
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, nearly 20 and 24%, respectively. As for housing, almost all four countries have a high
level
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. The
USA
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 has the highest rate at about 26%, the lowest rate is
Canada
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's at 20%, and the UK's rate is slightly higher than
Japan
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's at 24 and 22, respectively. The highest figure for health care is around 8% in the
USA
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, and the lowest figure is nearly 3% in the UK. In
Canada
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 and
Japan
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, the same indicator is around 4%. Regarding Clothing, almost all countries have similar figures, the highest in
Canada
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 at 7%, the lowest in the
USA
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 at 4%,
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Japan
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and Japan
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 slightly lower than the UK at approximately 5% and 6%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan, level, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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