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The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 bar graph displays the number of men and women who studied full-time and part-time in Britain over the course of three periods.
Comparing
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 with
the
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full-time education, part-time education had the highest percentage which had a major impact on women
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ranges
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 more than 100000
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 the period
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1990/91.
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 the odds in
male
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upto
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up to
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 1000 in 1970/71. Potentially in 1980/81 and 1990/
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 the part-time had an equal ratio of above 800. Coming back to women the first four years had a slight difference in the part-time education. In terms of
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full-time,
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 all the 3 years in both male and female
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 very less with the percentile of 300. But in both the categories in 1990/91 had an increase in the ratio and the other two did not stand out on the expectation.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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