You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months •say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Sir, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am Lahiru Wellalage and I would like to request
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give me an opportunity to work in the company head office as a Manager which is located in Colombo, Sri Lanka. I have considered
about
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this
option and
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to work
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with them because I will be able to gain my knowledge and skills with a good remuneration package which is
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important aspect at
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moment for me. I am eagerly looking forward to experiencing the new culture
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expanding my social circle. I would like to mention that I am happy to continue my current responsibilities
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overseas. I think that way is more suitable for you to go ached without any inconvenience. So, I kindly request you to arrange
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remote work facility
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me.
Furthermore
, I strongly expect your help in
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circumstance to grab
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valuable opportunity to develop my career. I am looking forward
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a favourable reply from you soon. Let us meet and discuss
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this
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sincerely, Lahiru Wellalage
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly outline how your work could be done while you are away, including any specific arrangements or support you might need.
task achievement
Consider expanding more on why working at the head office would benefit both you and the company, linking your personal development to potential contributions to the company's goals.
coherence and cohesion
Pay close attention to the clarity and organization of your paragraphs. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and follow with supporting details.
language accuracy
Review your letter for minor grammatical errors and typos to ensure a polished presentation.
greeting and closing
Your letter has a clear opening and closing, setting a polite and respectful tone.
single idea per paragraph
You've structured your letter into paragraphs, each focusing on a different aspect of your request, which enhances readability.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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