The diagram below shows the production and processing of milk production for commercial sale. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

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The process diagram illustrates the

manifacturing

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manufacturing

milk

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production for local stores.

Overall

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, there is

main

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a main

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resource as

milk

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and 3 machines which will manufacture

daily

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dairy

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products,

also

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there are 7 steps which can be shortened into main 4 steps. Beginning with preparing cows for milking and ending up with delivering the products to supermarkets. To commence with, farmers will prepare cows for milking by grazing them,

then

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they will go through the milking machine twice a day.

After

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this

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milk

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will be held in

special

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a special

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machine called refrigeration storage for days,

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then

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and then

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it will be delivered by tanker to

dairy

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the dairy

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. There it would appear as cheese,

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butter or it would stay as

milk

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and will be pasteurized and packaged. The process

is finishing

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finishes

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saling

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selling

the ready

stuffs

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stuff

kinds of stuff

pieces of stuff

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in shops and markets.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words milk with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

133 words

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