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Some individuals encourage keeping pets very well for offspring but others believe it is very harmful and unhealthy. In
this
essay, I will discuss two views of what a band is doing to
treasure
. On the one hand, nowadays more and more offspring want to keep domestic
animals
.
Such
as
dogs
, cats, fish or other
animals
which is why domestic
animals
never bore them. Keeping pets have a range of benefits.
For instance
, whenever offspring feel alone, domestic
animals
always help them. Nowadays,
dogs
are very loyal to
people
also
I have two
dogs
now and they are very playful and beautiful. I have been keeping them
since
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two or three years.
Therefore
, some
people
prefer to give
treasure
to their offspring. The other side of the view is about keeping lovers unhealthy and dangerous. Domestic
animals
are
also
harmful things.
Such
as, nowadays more and more children go to hospital for their health.
Dogs
and other
animals
bite children.
Therefore
, more and more
people
do not buy
treasure
for their offspring.
For example
, I always see a range of raging
dogs
on the streets. More and more offspring health-damaging in China now. It has been increasing for one or three decades. Special workers are catching them now and special workers sometimes kill them or put them in a cell. In conclusion, In my opinion, keeping
treasure
is very useful.
People
have to inject domestic
animals
. If they are already rejected, they never bite offspring.
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