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Band 2.5

You have received an email message from your English-speaking pen-friend Neil: .It turns out that I grew taller and now I need new clothes. Where do you buy clothes? Do you prefer dressing casually or formally? Is it important for Russian teenagers to keep up-to-date with current fashion trends? Why, or why not? My brother has just come from a football match... Write an email to Neil. In your message: • answer his questions; ask 3 questions about the football match

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Dear Neil, Thank you for your email. I am very glad to hear from you again. In your
email
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 you asked me about fashion. Let me answer your questions. I
usully
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usually
 buy clothes in stores like Ostin and Streetbeat. These stores offer a wide range of clothes that are suitable for everyday wear. As for me, I prefer dressing formally because I want to make a good impression on
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people, it is important for Russian teenagers to keep up-to-date with current fashion trends because fashion is
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 crucial part of our lives and
therefore
 young people should know the latest trends in
this
 direction to look good in society. So, you mentioned the football match. Where was the match held? How long did it
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? How many players took part in the match?
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 I have to go now. Write back soon Best wishes, George
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Content Depth
Try to elaborate more on your personal experiences and examples when answering questions. This will give your email a more detailed and engaging dimension.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using a wider range of linking words to improve the flow of your ideas. This can make your writing more coherent and easier to follow.
Task Response
Engage more directly with the questions asked. This means not only answering them but also adding your own thoughts and reflections to show deeper thinking.
Task Achievement
You answered all of the questions asked, showing a good understanding of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
The email is well-structured with clear paragraphing, which helps in conveying your message effectively.
Content
You provided a clear preference regarding your style of dressing, and you explained the importance of fashion trends among Russian teenagers, which adds a personal touch to your writing.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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