The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. (the piano was over 10% in 2005, over 20% in 2010, about 35% in 2015; the guitar was over 10% in 2005, about 18% in 2010, 40% in 2015; the drums was about 5% in 1005, about 4% in 2010, about 10% in 2015; the violin was 10% in 2005, 9% in 2010, 5% in 2015)
The chart illustrates information about the proportion of musical instruments among school children who are learning in the years 2005, 2010 and 2015.
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On the other hand
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Looking at statistics, Guitar was the second largest percentage in 2005 and 2010 with 10% and 18% respectively and In 2015, it was the highest rate up to 40%. Whereas
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In terms of Drums and Violin, noticed that they did not exceed 10%. Violins showed a downward trend, almost 10% in 2005, then
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