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The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.

The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.
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The figure below depicts the trend regarding the
population
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 growth of
India
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 and
China
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 in the first half of the 21st century. An increase in
population
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 was noticed in both
China
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 and
India
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 in the past 20 years. Starting with 1.25
billion
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 in 2000,
China
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 was more populous compared to
India
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. Meanwhile, there were only a
billion
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 people in
India
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. A moderate upsurge was
then
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 shown, reaching a current level of 1.4
billion
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 in 2020.
While
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 in
India
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, a steeper increase was shown at the same time, attaining 1.32
billion
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 in 2020. Despite a sharp increase,
India
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 still has a smaller
population
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 size than
China
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 now. The predicted trend of
population
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 growth of the mentioned countries will diverge to different trajectories in the future. The
population
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 of
China
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 will decline minimally, followed by the peak in 2030 with a
population
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just
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 over 1.4
billion
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.
However
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, the steep growth will still continue in
India
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. It will surpass
China
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 in 2030 and reach the final level of 1.6
billion
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 in 2050.
Although
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 both countries have experienced a
population
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 surge in the past 20 years, the trend of
population
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 changes is predicted to diverge in the future.
On the other hand
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, it is noted that
China
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 has a more stable
population
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 change compared to
India
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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