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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 qnd 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 qnd 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart represents the export
earings
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earnings
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 of the
year
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 2015 and 2016 and
other
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the other
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 chart shows the percentage change in values for the
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year
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years
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 201 and 2016.I will explain in the following paragraphs.
Overall
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, we would say that there is
increase
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an increase
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 in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of petroleum
products
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 , engineered goods, agriculture
products
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 and textiles. There was no increase in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of gems and jewellery.
Firstly
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, petroleum
products
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are
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were
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 high in export earnings in both
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year
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years
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 in 2015 60$ billion and in 2016 was around $63
billions
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billion
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 respectively. Second stands
engineered
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good
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goods
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it
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which
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 was around $58 billion in the
year
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 2015 and $61 billion in the
year
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 2016. Agricultural
products
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was
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apply
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increased
similiary
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similarly
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on
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in
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 both the years and
gems
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for gems
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 and jewellery
products
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 the increased amount was
same
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the same
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 in both
the
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apply
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years.
Textile
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The textile
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 was the least among all the four
products
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, it was nearly to$35
billions
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billion
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 in 2015 and $31
billions
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billion
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 in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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