some people think that interview is not relaible method of choosing whom to employe and there are other better methods. to what extant do you agree or disagree.

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think that
interview
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is not a good
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to
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employment and there are other better methods. In my opinion,
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disagree with
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statement since interviews
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the most workable process in
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an employees
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. On the one hand, some
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many
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the stuff.
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, in some creative
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they are more
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on
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personalities and
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rather than interviewing.
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employeers
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employees
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hight quality
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portfolio
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and less
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for resumes, and
interview
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sessions.
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,
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field
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of
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may think interviewing is not
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relaible
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reliable
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.
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,
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play
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vital role and
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an efficient way to recruit
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staff
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. Because between
employeers
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employers
employees
and employees they
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to have chemistry to feel each
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reliability.
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,
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recruitments
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is
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very competitive
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non-professional
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non-professionals
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also
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can apply for
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job.
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, that might cause the wrong hired an ineligible person to our company, to
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avoid
those
interview
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secession's questions and answers can let
employeers
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employers
employees
known the candidate is
eligiable
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eligible
or not. In conclusion, at the time there have variety of approaches to
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an eligible employees
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among
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them
i
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think
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the intervew
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intervew
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interview
method is more
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and easy to understand the candidate's personality.
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