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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays the
ratio
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 of tourists in England who went to the Brighton landmarks between 1980 and 2010 with a five-year gap.
Firstly
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, people who visited art gallery had increased from 1980 to 1985 and its
ratio
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 changed from nearly 20 per
cent
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 to close to 40 per
cent
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 but its reputation rapidly declined in 25 years and its percentage was under 10 per
cent
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 in 2010. The popularity of the pavilion rose from nearly 24 per
cent
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 to 50 rate between 1980 and 1995.
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, the pavilion lost its popularity and its
ratio
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 decreased to 30 per
cent
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 in 2010.
Secondly
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, the pier's
ratio
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 had started at 10 per
cent
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 and its rate increased to more than 20 per
cent
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 in 30 years. Festivsal
ratio
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 had not changed too much in 30 years, its initial
ratio
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 was 30 per
cent
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 and its
ratio
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 had decreased to nearly 27 per
cent
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.
To sum up
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, the reputation of some attractions had changed drastically
such
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 as the pavilion and art gallery but the percentage of tourists who visited the festival nearly were the same.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ratio, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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