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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts illustrate the average percentages of
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 in specific portions used in
USA
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the USA
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, excessive eating from them will be unhealthier.
Overall
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, It can be seen that the dinner
percentage
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in
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of
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 the
Sodium
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 and saturated fat are the biggest
percentage
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while
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in
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apply
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added
sugar
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 is less than them.
In addition
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, the breakfast
percentage
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in
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of
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the
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apply
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Saturated fat and Added
sugar
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 are similar and the
Sodium
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 is slightly lower.
While
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 the highest
percentage
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 of snake part in Added
sugar
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 at 42% , It is the lowest average in
Sodium
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 at 14 %. The
percentage
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 of breakfast
meal
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meals
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 in saturated fat and added
sugar
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 are similar at 16%
,
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apply
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 but in the
Sodium
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 less 2% than them. As be noted that, the
percentage
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 of lunch
meal
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meals
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 in
Sodium
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, Saturated fat and Added
sugar
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 are slightly reduced
29
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by 29
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%,26% and 19%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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