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Write a report summarizing the information. Select and describe the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The line chart below shows the per capita meat consumption in four different countries (USA, UK, Brazil, and India) from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in European Countries from 1979 to 2004.

Write a report summarizing the information. Select and describe the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The line chart below shows the per capita meat consumption in four different countries (USA, UK, Brazil, and India) from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in European Countries from 1979 to 2004.
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This
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 graph shows us the four kinds of
meat
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 that European countries consume,
chicken
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,
beef
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, lamb and
finally
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fish
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. The graph shows from 1979 to 2004.
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 it's evident that Europeans consume a lot of
meat
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, but the
chicken
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 since 1990 started skyrocketing to levels almost unachievable.
On the other
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hand
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 we can see that the least consumed products are
fish
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 and lamb
while
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beef
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 fluctuated but after
that
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that,
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 it went on a skyfall. In 1979,
Fish
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 was the
meat
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 that was less consumed with a little more than 50,
on the other hand
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 with a little more than 200
its
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it
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 the
beef
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,
chicken
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 and lamb were almost the same at 150 each. After that
fish
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 fluctuated between 1984 and 1989 but in those years
fish
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 was
also
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 the
meat
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 less consumed,
beef
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 fluctuated between 1979 and 1984 but after 1984 we can see a significant fall, The highest peak that
beef
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 reached was almost 250 in the year 1984, in a different light we can see that the
chicken
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 in the early 2000 reached its climax. Peculiarly In 1989
the
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apply
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chicken
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 and
beef
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 were almost in the same range but the European people started consuming a lot more
chicken
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 than
beef
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.
Fish
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 is always almost the same always being the less consumed but
its
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 always reliable to get a good meal.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, chicken, beef, fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "a little more than" was used 2 times.
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