IELTS Letter Writing / GT Writing Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job Write at least 150 words.
Dear Mr. Manager
I hope
this
letter finds you in good condition. Let me introduce myself, my name Yohanes
and I work as an accountant in Add a missing verb
is Yohanes
financial
department. I am writing to you to seek Add an article
the financial
permision
Correct your spelling
permission
of joining
Change preposition
to join
Investment
Analyst Correct article usage
the Investment
class
in upcoming
month.
Add an article
the upcoming
To begin
with, I got this
information last
week as my friend from another company told me. Also
, he told me that this
class
will be held by Warren Buffet. As you know, that
Warren Buffet is the master of fundamental Correct word choice
apply
investment
. Thus
, I consider that it will be great if I join this
class
owing to remarkable
ability of Add an article
the remarkable
moderator
.
Correct article usage
the moderator
Secondly
, I ask my leader to let me join it next month. However
, she suggest
Change the verb form
suggests
me
Correct pronoun usage
I
to
ask Fix the infinitive
apply
Correct pronoun usage
you about
about
Change preposition
for
this
permission to you owing to your position as an
manager. Change the article
a
Despite
, I know that Correct pronoun usage
Despite this
you
will be difficult to allow me Correct pronoun usage
it
because
my job Fix the infinitive
to because
need
my Change the verb form
needs
responsbility
.
Eventually, I Correct your spelling
responsibility
am
glad if I Wrong verb form
will be
will
get Verb problem
apply
this
opportunity to join the course. I am looking forward to your response and I would be thankful if you consider me to join Investment
Analyst Correct article usage
the Investment
class
as it will be prestigious if company
has Add an article
the company
a company
Investment
Analyst to manage the company's wealth as Correct article usage
an Investment
good
as possible and get profit Change the word
well
due to
the
ability.
Sincerely
YohanesChange the word
their
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Tone and Style
Ensure to maintain a professional tone and use formal language when writing to your manager. Replace casual expressions like 'Let me introduce myself, my name Yohanes' with a more formal introduction.
Structure and Clarity
Clarify and elaborate on your request and how the company can assist, preferably in separate paragraphs.
Grammar and Accuracy
Correct grammatical mistakes, such as verb tense and article usage, to improve readability and professionalism.
Details and Specificity
Include specific details about the course, such as its duration, location, and how it precisely benefits your role within the company.
Formality
Avoid using informal contractions ('I am glad if I will get...') in formal writings. Instead, use full forms ('I would be glad if I were to get...').
Relevance
Your letter effectively communicates your interest in the course and its relevance to your job.
Structure
Good effort in structuring the letter with an introduction, body, and conclusion.