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IELTS Letter Writing / GT Writing Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Mr. Manager I hope
this
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 letter finds you in good condition. Let me introduce myself, my name
Yohanes
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is Yohanes
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 and I work as an accountant in
financial
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the financial
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 department. I am writing to you to seek
permision
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permission
of joining
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to join
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Investment
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the Investment
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 Analyst
class
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 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 month.
To begin
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 with, I got
this
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 information
last
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 week as my friend from another company told me.
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, he told me that
this
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class
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 will be held by Warren Buffet. As you know,
that
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apply
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Warren Buffet is the master of fundamental
investment
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.
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, I consider that it will be great if I join
this
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class
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 owing to
remarkable
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the remarkable
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 ability of
moderator
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the moderator
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.
Secondly
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, I ask my leader to let me join it next month.
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, she
suggest
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me
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I
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to
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ask
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you about
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about
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for
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this
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 permission to you owing to your position as
an
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 manager.
Despite
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Despite this
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, I know that
you
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it
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 will be difficult to allow me
because
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to because
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 my job
need
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needs
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 my
responsbility
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responsibility
. Eventually, I
am
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will be
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 glad if I
will
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get
this
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 opportunity to join the course. I am looking forward to your response and I would be thankful if you consider me to join
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Investment
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the Investment
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 Analyst
class
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 as it will be prestigious if
company
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the company
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 has
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Investment
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an Investment
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 Analyst to manage the company's wealth as
good
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well
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 as possible and get profit
due to
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the
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 ability. Sincerely Yohanes

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Tone and Style
Ensure to maintain a professional tone and use formal language when writing to your manager. Replace casual expressions like 'Let me introduce myself, my name Yohanes' with a more formal introduction.
Structure and Clarity
Clarify and elaborate on your request and how the company can assist, preferably in separate paragraphs.
Grammar and Accuracy
Correct grammatical mistakes, such as verb tense and article usage, to improve readability and professionalism.
Details and Specificity
Include specific details about the course, such as its duration, location, and how it precisely benefits your role within the company.
Formality
Avoid using informal contractions ('I am glad if I will get...') in formal writings. Instead, use full forms ('I would be glad if I were to get...').
Relevance
Your letter effectively communicates your interest in the course and its relevance to your job.
Structure
Good effort in structuring the letter with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional development
  • Training course
  • Skills enhancement
  • Financial sponsorship
  • Institution offering
  • Work efficiency
  • Project success
  • Service/product quality
  • Acquiring new skills
  • Alignment with company's goals
  • Request for support
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