The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart illustrates the proportion of travellers to England who visited four distinct sites in Brighton from 1980 to 2010 From an
overall
perspective, it is evident that the percentage of individuals who attended the art gallery and festival
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a downward trend,
whereas
a reverse pattern could be seen in the figures in the pavilion and pier over the surveyed period. In 1980, The pier had the lowest tourist visitation rate,with approximately 10%.
In addition
, the data on the art gallery and the pavilion was higher, at around 22% and 25%, respectively.
However
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the festival accounted for the highest, at 30%. After increasing slightly to around 15% in 1985, the number of tourists visiting the Pier rose to 22% in the final year.
Moreover
, there was a rise in the data on the Pavilion, reaching a peak of nearly 50% in 1995,
while
that of the festival dropped to a little higher than 25%.
In addition
,the
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of visitors
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the art gallery showed a sharp increase
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around 40% in 1985 before gradually falling to somewhere in the vicinity of 10%
at the end
of the provided time frame.
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