The bar chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart and the table illustrate how women and men divide their household chores in The United Kingdom. The tasks are divided into six categories. Both
of
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the chart and the table measured in
minutes
each person in a day.
Overall
, females took longer
time
to complete all those tasks than males.
Furthermore
, females did the tasks more frequently in four
groups
, namely
Group
1(cooking, baking, and washing),
Group
2 (cleaning, and house tidying),
Group
4 ( care of own children and play), and
Group
6 (Clothes, washing, ironing, and sewing). Meanwhile,
male
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spent more
minutes
to do
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the other
groups
. Females consumed most of
her
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time
in
doing
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Group
1, just above 70
minutes
, and
this
the
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highest
minutes
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spent among all the
groups
. The rest
,
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female
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used 58, 21, 45, 9.5 and 25 to finish
Group
2,
Group
3,
Group
4,
Group
5, and
Group
6 respectively. Males need the longest
time
to complete
Group
3, roughly 50, among all the
groups
.
Additionally
, they finished
Group
1,
Group
2,
Group
4,
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5 using an average
time
between 10 and 30
minutes
. To
finished
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Group
6, Males needed the least
minutes
, which was only 2
minutes
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, time, groups, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "divide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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