The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.
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about 160. The Sutton Wood is at
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The West Eaton and Church Mount are both start and end at 50 and 150. The West Eaton is rarely higher than Church Mount, but they always same Correct your spelling
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, the West Eaton and Church Mount both rise slightly, and the Ryeslip and Sutton Wood switch the first and second place at the end
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