The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.

The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.
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the
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of book rentals from different libraries
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june
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to
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2014. The Ryeslip get the highest
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which is 300 at
beginning
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,
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it slightly
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decrease
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about 160. The Sutton Wood is
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the
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second place in
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june
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and
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Ryeslip by slowly
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275 until July.
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July to August, the
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the amount to 100 and
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in August. After that, it
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the
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to 300 as fast as it
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decline
before to getting the first place again. The West Eaton and Church Mount are both start and end at 50 and 150. The West Eaton is rarely higher than Church Mount, but they always same
trand
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trend
during the period.
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, the West Eaton and Church Mount both rise slightly, and the Ryeslip and Sutton Wood switch the first and second place
at the end
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