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he line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents the correlation between the number of
crimes
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 with
age
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 and the pie chart illustrates the percentages of the different types of
crimes
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.in the UK in the previous year.
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, it is interesting to note that the number of
crimes
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 increased from teenagers to the early twenties and most of the
crimes
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 were reported as violent cases. Looking into details, none of the incidents were recorded until the
age
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 of 8 years.
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, with the increase in
age
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 from 12 , the crime rate rocketed and had its peak at 80,000
crimes
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 for the
age
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 of 20 years. Afterwards, with
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maturity, the trend decreased drastically reaching a 20000 violent
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 among people with 28 years old.
Finally
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, when it came to the late 50s
this
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 amount experienced a steady decrease and became stable at around 8000 murders. Moving onto the crime types, the majority of the
crimes
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 were violent category with 46 per cent which is double the number of property
crimes
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.
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, drug-related cruelties are
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 almost closer to land
crimes
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. But the least proportion was reported as public order
crimes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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