In addition to your full-time job, you are taking a 15-hour Computer Science course. You now find that you cannot continue with the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter: · Describe your schedule and situation · Explain why you cannot continue the course · Say what action you would like to take

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Dear Ms.Montana, I hope

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letter finds you in great condition and you are doing well there, I am writing

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letter to inform you that I cannot continue the computer science

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several reasons.

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with, I would tell to you about my issue.

Firstly

, I always have overtime in my full-time job and I

also

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six times per week Monday until Saturday I felt exhausted

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this

circumstance. I have

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decision

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that I can not continue

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course

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very crowded, if

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still force

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activity it will be not good for my health.

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result

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I can not focus

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my job eventually it can

infulence

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influence

my productivity in my company. I am going to continue my

course

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holiday next month, and

along with

this

letter

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I am going to reserve

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for me to take

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again

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the next month.

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you for your nice attention and I

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am looking

forward to hearing from you soon. Best regard, Mr.Rexy

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Coherence & Cohesion

Try to outline your letter more clearly, dividing it into short, distinct paragraphs for each part of the question (your situation, the explanation for leaving, and the action you'd like to take).

Coherence & Cohesion

Work on using a variety of sentence structures and linking words to improve the flow of your writing. This will help make your letter more cohesive.

Task Achievement

Be specific about your situation and requests. For example, instead of saying 'I am going to reserve seat for me to take course again for the next month,' clarify how you're planning to do this or if you need any specific assistance from the tutor.

General

Review your letter for grammatical errors and typos to ensure clarity and professionalism in your writing.

Task Achievement

You clearly expressed your intention to leave the course and mentioned a brief plan for the future, which directly addresses the task's requirements.

Writing Tone

Your respectful tone and polite expressions such as 'I hope this letter finds you in great condition' and 'Thanks you for your nice attention' are suitable for the context of this letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

176 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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