In addition to your full-time job, you are taking a 15-hour Computer Science course. You now find that you cannot continue with the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter: · Describe your schedule and situation · Explain why you cannot continue the course · Say what action you would like to take
Dear Ms.Montana,
I hope
this
letter finds you in great condition and you are doing well there, I am writing this
letter to inform you that I cannot continue the computer science course
as
several reasons.
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for
To begin
with, I would tell to you about my issue. Firstly
, I always have overtime in my full-time job and I also
works
six times per week Monday until Saturday I felt exhausted Change the verb form
work
with
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by
this
circumstance.
I have make
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made
decision
that I can not continue Add an article
a decision
the decision
this
course
due to
my schedule is
very crowded, if Wrong verb form
being
i
still force Change the capitalization
I
this
activity it will be not good for my health. Consequently
, as the
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a
result
I can not focus Add a comma
result,
with
my job eventually it can Change preposition
on
infulence
my productivity in my company.
I am going to continue my Correct your spelling
influence
course
in winter
holiday next month, and Correct article usage
the winter
along with
this
letter
I am going to reserve Add a comma
letter,
seat
for me to take Add an article
a seat
course
again Add an article
the course
for
the next month. Change preposition
apply
Thanks
you for your nice attention and I Replace the word
Thank
amlooking
forward to hearing from you soon.
Best regard,
Mr.RexyCorrect your spelling
am looking
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to outline your letter more clearly, dividing it into short, distinct paragraphs for each part of the question (your situation, the explanation for leaving, and the action you'd like to take).
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on using a variety of sentence structures and linking words to improve the flow of your writing. This will help make your letter more cohesive.
Task Achievement
Be specific about your situation and requests. For example, instead of saying 'I am going to reserve seat for me to take course again for the next month,' clarify how you're planning to do this or if you need any specific assistance from the tutor.
General
Review your letter for grammatical errors and typos to ensure clarity and professionalism in your writing.
Task Achievement
You clearly expressed your intention to leave the course and mentioned a brief plan for the future, which directly addresses the task's requirements.
Writing Tone
Your respectful tone and polite expressions such as 'I hope this letter finds you in great condition' and 'Thanks you for your nice attention' are suitable for the context of this letter.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,
